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I no longer care
It's just a mere wound,
just another drop of blood,
and just a little sob.
It becomes routine,
part of the coldness of your hearts.
Please tell me why God has chosen me
to live on this planet.
Somberly, along this oppressive path.
I wanted nothing.
And you got everything.
Pretty bad. At least I tried.
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BittersweetObsession Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012   General Artist
"Somberly, along this oppressive path.
I wanted nothing.
And you got everything. "

Ahhh my gosh that ending, I actually really like this.

I myself have fought the internal battles of emotional poetry. There are just days where I want to sit and write about people who have wronged me, everything that has ever oppressed me, angry, sad, cathartic poems. Oh my gosh

I wish you didn't have such low opinion of yourself, you truly are not a bad poet at all. I would just recommend that you expand vocabulary a bit and explore a variety of subject matter. :D There are awesome writing prompt websites that can give you ideas if you're looking to keep yourself from writing depressing poems (unless that's what you intend to write, which is fine, hehe) I went through an enormous phase/writer's block sequence where I would just write every negative thought choking me at the moment. I have tried to digress from these as much as possible, I feel much more fulfilled knowing that I've covered lots of things :D

Anywho, vocabulary is yo' best friend. Once you can find creative words to substitute universal words such as sobs, wounds, etc., your wriitng will improve tenfold. Slight rearranging of words can cause grand outcomes! :D

I am definitely going to read more of your lovely work, despite what I've said you have an interesting style~ :3
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HiddenShadowSpirit Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks for the advice.
And I'm glad you think that I'm not too bad of a poet.
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BittersweetObsession Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012   General Artist
Of course not, m'dear! I think you have much skill. :meow:
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TMMvocaloid Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Student Writer
no. not bad. you wana see bad, look at the poems i wrote at the begginingof my deviant art account when i was reading twilight and my friend helped me write so i do not take all blame. (please dont read them.they are soooo stupid)
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HiddenShadowSpirit Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Lol.
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TMMvocaloid Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Student Writer
i just got 4 watches. IDC about stupid watches! I ven deleted them from my profile because while i may have alot, there are so many talented artists out there who arnt recognized.
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HiddenShadowSpirit Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm trying to find more. Neeed more poeeets.
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TMMvocaloid Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Student Writer
yeah. i luv poets^^. but i just dont believe that its fair. one of my friends has 30 watchers and ZERO deviations.
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HiddenShadowSpirit Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
That makes no sense. XD
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TMMvocaloid Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Student Writer
I know!
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