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I love you more than anything
more than anyone,
I'll miss you more than I miss anything,
even the bliss that I had lost
I want you more than my hidden desires
that tug at my aching heart
But it seems that you have ran off,
out of my arms,
and out of sight
And I'm sorry
for saying all the wrong words,
and being all the wrong things.
I love you
so even if you don't come back,
my love will forever be for no one but you.
Quickly written, not too good.
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Lyceum514 Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2013  Student Artist
;_; the feels man, the feels ;_;
love it though ;_;
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HiddenShadowSpirit Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
;_; Thanks, man. Thanks.
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ShidaHeiwajima Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012   Writer
I love your poems. ^.^
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HiddenShadowSpirit Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks.
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phantasmicmelody Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012
Don't say that this poem isn't good. It's good. It reminds me of Pablo Neruda, actually, "I do not love you except because I love you" - in the way that it uses love to describe love, cycling back the same way that love does. It's great because it embodies the spirit of love!: That the two parties use love to reinforce the love and return to the love. Lol! There's no other way to describe it.

By the way, if you appreciate the comment/critique, could you take a minute and vote for my poem to help me win a scholarship? Just send "They Dreamed They Were Oysters" in the subject line of an email to votejustpoetry@comcast.net . You can read the poem on my profile, you can also read the rest if the entries at justpoetry.org
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HiddenShadowSpirit Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you. Also, I will get to your poem when I can.
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phantasmicmelody Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012
You're welcome, and thank you so much!! I really appreciate you taking a second to vote.
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HiddenShadowSpirit Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem.
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TMMvocaloid Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Student Writer
quickly written poems come truly from the heart. not like revising what was already perfect. beautiful.
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HiddenShadowSpirit Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you...
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